Thursday, August 27, 2009

Exposition writing - Can you see the statement of position? ..the emotive verbs and the series of arguments and a conclusion!

ExpositionEvery child shouldn’t eat lollies every day.
I firmly disagree that everybody should eat lollies everyday because you can get sick, and if you get too sick, you might die.
Firstly your teeth will rot and your parents will have to work harder for more money.
Secondly parents will have to keep wasting their money going to the dentist.
Thirdly their parents will have to work harder because their children will go crazy.
Finally you have to pay for the lollies, that’s why I think it is not a good idea eating lollies every day.
By Ben
Exposition
I strongly believe that all children should not eat lollies because it is bad for your health.
Firstly….your teeth will rot and your parents will have to pay for new ones.
Secondly you will get fat and you will have health problems with sugar and you will get injections and they will see your blood pressure.
Thirdly, also you can get hyper and your parents will have work much harder to stop you from getting hyper.
Finally you will get lollies but you will have to go on a diet and do more exercise.
Gerry
Exposition
I disagree that all children should not eat lollies every day.
Firstly you will have to go to the dentist every weekend and I wouldn’t like that!
Secondly you will lose teeth. If you lose all your teeth you’ll be gummy.
Thirdly it will cost money and if you buy too many lollies you will go bankrupt.
Finally if you eat too many lollies you will get hyper and you will mess up your home and your parents will have to clean up.
If you get fat you will die and healthy people know what to eat.
Cole

Exposition
I strongly believe that children shouldn’t eat lollies every day because of the sugar.
Firstly your teeth will rot and your parents will have to pay the price.
Secondly your teeth will have a hole and you will have to go to the dentist. The dentist is not always open.
Thirdly if you get sick you won’t be able to go to school for a whole week.
Finally the doctor’s nurse will make you have to go and drill your teeth.
I strongly recommend that every child in the world should brush their teeth every day.
Alexander
Exposition
I believe that every child should not eat lollies every day.
Firstly you will get cavities.
Secondly your parents will have to pay for the lollies.
Thirdly your parents will have to pay to get your teeth fixed.
Finally you would have too much sugar in your body and your body would get very sick.
We need to keep New Zealand children healthy. We need to give them vegetables too.
Keep them strong and healthy.
Jack
Exposition
I disagree that every child should have lollies every day.
Why? Why shouldn’t we? Well firstly the lollies make your teeth rot so your parents have to pay more money for the dentist.
Secondly your parents have to work harder because the lollies make you go hyper.
Thirdly when your child sees something he would like, then his mum or dad couldn’t buy it, because his mum or dad has no money because their mum or dad would have spent it on lollies.
Finally the children would get fat from the lollies.
So please…. Do not feed your child lollies!
By Hamish

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